In the English class last week, Teacher Lee was teaching while jerry was nodding off in class. At the beginning, Mr. Lee wasn’t aware of Jerry. However, he heard the laughter among Jerry’s friends, and he knew something wrong with Jerry. When Me. Lee turned his face to look at Jerry, he was outraged because Jerry fell asleep and snored in class.
Jerry was dreaming himself teaching grammar after twenty years. Even though he taught hard, all the students in class were sleeping. Jerry tried to raise his voice so that the students might be awake, but it did not work. He flew into rage and hit the desk to wake up the students.
At the same time, Mr. Lee couldn’t stand Jerry. He came closer to Jerry and woke him up. “Wake up!” Jerry said angrily to Mr. Lee.
“What’s going on?” Lee asked. Every student in the class was laughing except for Jerry. Now, he realized he was in the dream; he really felt embarrassed.
You did a fine job except for a couple mistakes. “Jerry tried to raise his voice so that the students might be awaken,” awaken is not properly used here. “At the beginning, Mr. Lee wasn’t aware of Jerry however,” there should be a semicolon before however.
Dear Iris:
You did a fine job except for a couple mistakes. “Jerry tried to raise his voice so that the students might be awaken,” awaken is not properly used here. “At the beginning, Mr. Lee wasn’t aware of Jerry however,” there should be a semicolon before however.
By: lilliantw on 一月 14, 2008
at 8:35 午後